The Chemical Capitalists

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I’m working on my first real novel, and posting while I write so that I can get feedback on what to change and do differently.  After reading it/the overview, comment below and let me know what you think!

Overview:

It all started with a note….

When Isabella Davids stumbles upon The Free Thinkers, a group of young hacktivists, she instantly becomes enthralled in their dreams of schemes and conspiracy.  Without much thought, she plunges into their world, and finds that she, too, believes the terrible propaganda which they read and the dismal view of the world which they all have.

What you may be surprised to know is, they are right.  The group, guided by their ideals of what the world should be versus what it is today, uncovers the most guarded secret in the history of mankind.  But nothing is ever that easy.  They become caught up in a desperate battle of survival and truth, against the most powerful individuals alive.

If it were a matter of life and death, it would be easy.  But this is a matter of truth, or living a lie.

Summary with Spoilers:

There is a group of hacktivist college students working out of an abandoned apartment.  Their goal is to uncover what they believe to be a great secret about the way that our society is working.  They don’t actually know what they are trying to find, but from other evidence that they have accumulated (ex. Panama Papers), they know that there is something that the government, or perhaps just a very powerful individual, doesn’t want us to know.  After a lot of work, they stumble upon evidence that suggests that there is a conspiracy going on among the top 1% of the top 1% of the top 1% of powerful people in the world.  By that, I don’t just mean those who are very very rich.  It consists of influential individuals such as the Clintons, Bill Gates, King Salman bin Abdulaziz al-Saud of Saudi Arabia, and others like them.  What they soon realize is that this goes a lot deeper than just a few fireside chats.  They are mind controlling the public, and doing so without anyone else noticing.  Frightened, the group tries to open up to the world, but they face still competition from the 1%.  In order to get around censors, they write a book, which is what you will actually be reading.

Questions for readers:

  • Are the first 3 chapters (especially the 1st) boring and should be deleted?
  • What do you think of Izzy?
  • Of how she ends up stumbling across The Free Thinkers?

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